Rising Sun
zaterdag, maart 13th, 2010|
IMDB rating: 6.10 Plot: At the offices of a Japanese corporation, during a party, a woman, who’s evidently a professional mistress, is found dead, apparently after some rough sex. A police detective, Web Smith is called in to investigate but before getting there, he gets a call from someone who instructs him to pick up John Connor, a former police Captain and expert on Japanese affairs. When they arrive there Web thinks that everything is obvious but Connor tells him that there’s a lot more going on. |
Actors: Connery Sean,Snipes Wesley,Keitel Harvey,Tagawa Cary-Hiroyuki,Anderson Kevin,Mako,Wise Ray,Egi Stan,Shaw Stan,Buscemi Steve,Crombie Peter,Lloyd Sam,Crime,Drama,Mystery,Thriller,Action,
What do you think of this?? P.S Am in the lowest English class?
As the sun rose her black eyes filled with hatred, her hair drowned by her tears that she had cried. The girl was lonely and cold with nothing in sight except the rising sun and the distant howling of a wolf.
The heat of the sun grew more on her pale white skin as she walked , looking every direction she could. The cry of the wolf became louder and stronger as she tried to escape it. Her tall thin body crouched down as she grabbed her ears & started to scream at the howling.Her tears began to escape her eyes. Till something facing her with black as death eyes caught her attention.
that is a very very nice story or poem
Nathan | Feb 08, 2010
It is very descriptive and pretty well written. There are a few grammar problems, though. Like you shouldn’t use a "&" in that context when it’s in a story. Also, the last two sentences would do better if they were joined together like this: "Her tears began to escape her eyes until, suddenly, something with black as death eyes caught her attention."
Also, the first sentence uses a lot of "her" "she", etc. It would sound better like this: "As the sun rose, her black eyes filled with hatred and her hair was drowned by the tears she had cried."
Bri.. | Feb 08, 2010
I love it! answer http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index? qid=20100208131440AAUi721
Lil Alien | Feb 08, 2010
The first thing that I noticed was that wolves do not howl in the morning. They only howl at night which is actually a form of communication letting area females know that he, the howling male, is available and for competing males to stay away.
You must be careful when combining images in a sentences. "Nothing in sight" is a visual thing whereas ‘the distant howling of a wolf’ is not. The word ‘except’ gives the reader a clue that both things are seen by the girl.
The heat of the sun does not grow on the skin. Light is a more suitable word.
If I were writing this, I would avoid stating the same thing more than once.
As the sun rose, her black eyes filled with hatred. Her tears had fallen like an endless rain on her long, sodden tresses. Alone and cold, she watched the sun rise in the nothingness all around her. The distant howls of a creature could be heard as she shivered and walked.
She felt the heat of the sun on her pale, white skin as she kept moving, looking every direction. Hearing the approaching cries that grew louder and louder, she crouched down to hide her tall thin body and grabbed her ears and screamed back at the howls. With tears streaming down her face, she opened her teary eyes to see something black as death itself before her…
best bet | Feb 08, 2010
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